[0] An empty glass in hand, I lazily eye the faces of various people drinking and enjoying themselves in this pub. It isn't too crowded today. But [1] such is [2] the norm. I may also play a small part in the unpopularity of this establishment, myself. [2]
I move up from the creaking chair and walk toward the bartender.
“Give me some of the old white, Wes. [4]” I say to him.
“The usual, then. One glass of milk, coming up.” He responds.
This guy's name is Wesley. Beside being the owner and the sole employee at this old saloon I hang out at, he's also my stepbrother. I've already seen some folks wonder at how well the two of us get along despite not being related by blood. It's also thanks to him that I found a place to offer my “services”.
I pick up the glass, ready to return to my spot where I spent sitting most of the day, when Wesley speaks to me. [5]
“By the way, someone put up a poster for a job outside.”
“If it's another one of those put up by kids [6] as a prank where I'm drawn with a moustache and are [7] threatening to kick puppies I'm gonna get mad, Wes.”
“I think it's a real offer this time.”
I nod, put down my glass and head outside. On the wall of the building [8] I find a poster with a reward for capturing wanted criminals. The reward is 15,000 shilkers. Shilkers are the currency of our small but proud country, which was established after separating itself from our previous country over a dispute or whatnot. But we're not having a history lesson now. The wanted criminals are Eileen and Gus Borghe, a famous couple of thieves. Perhaps the most successful in this town.
I fit the paper into my jacket's pocket and head out into the streets.
“It's time to do the job [9], Wesson.” I say to myself as I straighten my hat.
After all, I'm a bounty hunter.
[0] Present tense is used throughout the story. This is a problematic choice. Stories should be told in past tense to avoid weird tense conflicts. See sentence [5], where this problem surfaces a bit.
[1] Avoid conjunctions at the beginning of a sentence. Join by a comma instead.
[2] 'such is' in itself conveys that the description is about the following subject. In this case however we are primarily saying something about the pub, but adding on to it that the description is normal for the pub. A more apt way of saying this would be "but that is normal".
[3] The way this sentence is worded relies to the reader that the speaker won't really tell us whether they play a part. What you probably wanted to say instead is that they themselves assume they might, but aren't sure about it. To achieve that effect better, it should be something akin to: "Perhaps I too am part of the reason why this establishment isn't very popular."
[4] The sentence does not actually end here, just the dialogue. Use a comma instead. As it is here, you have a quoted sentence followed by an incomplete one.
[5] Very confusing to read, mostly due to its length. Suggested fix: I was about to head back to my spot when Wesley speaks to me.
[6] The order of this sentence makes things weird to read. Suggested fix: If it's another one of those where I'm drawn with a moustache and am threatening to kick puppies like what the kids put up as a prank, I'm gonna get mad, Wes."
[7] Singular, "am".
[8] "of the building" is superfluous. I don't think people will assume there's just a wall in the middle of the street.
[9] This makes it sound as if some considerable time had passed since he saw the announcement and had to convince himself to do it first. How about "Time to get to work," instead?